In PA#3 you established a point of view (a thesis) on a subject and divided your support of that point of view into separate sub-arguments.
Note, for example, how Emily Poe does it in the sample. She claims in her thesis statement that "vegetarianism is clearly the better option for sustaining the Earth and all its inhabitants." She divides her support of that claim into three subtopics: environmental improvement, humane treatment of livestock, and improved personal health.
Presumably, in a paragraph that follows, she discusses the first of those sub-claims: That the vegetarian lifestyle improves the environment.
Look back at the introductory paragraph you wrote. Find your first sub-claim and write what would become the second paragraph of your essay. Use the following paragraph pattern:
1. Topic sentence/ statement of the claim
2. Explanation of the claim (spend some time here)
3. Evidence by example and detail
4. Evidence by quotation
Use the templates in TSIS to indicate the moves you are making.
Upload the paragraph here as a comment below by Sunday, 1/24 at 5 PM. Bring a hard copy to class on Monday. Really. I mean it this time. We'll definitely be spending some time in class making comments on each others' paragraphs.
Computers can be extremely proactive tools for students, and banning them from classrooms would completely diminish the students abilities to capitalize on many useful functions that would benefit them. Although computers can be distracting to some students, they are overall very useful tools as they can act as an easier way to take notes, dictionary, calculator, and encyclopedia among other things. Furthermore, This broadens the students ability to access critical information that could catar to their individual needs during a lecture. However, by not allowing students to use computers, they are putting students at a disadvantage and restricting their ability to learn. According to Schoolguides.com, "81 percent (of students) couldn't imagine doing their academic work without the aid of electronic devices." Because computers offer an abundant variety of useful tools, they should be embraced, just as they are embraced in the adult world.
ReplyDeleteGoogle Docs is superior to Microsoft word because of the easy capabilities to share and work collaboratively with a group. Microsoft word has long been considered the superior word processor but with Google Docs capability to share documents much more efficiently and quickly it has given microsoft some competition as the most effective word processor. The problem with sharing capabilities with microsoft word is to share a document, the easiest way is to send an email with the document attached to the email. Using Google Docs, sharing a document is as simple as pressing the share button in the corner of the page and typing in the email address of all persons with whom the author would like to share. This sharing capability allows any person the document is shared with to make changes or corrections at any time, or even at the same time. As PCmag.com describes it as, “It is Part office suite and part file-syncing service, Google Drive is the best online collaborative platform you'll find, and it's free. That's one sweet package.” Google Docs sharing and simultaneous editing ability far surpass the capabilities that microsoft word offers and that fact proves why Google Docs is a superior word processor.
ReplyDeleteSo like I said, people say that we are scatterbrained and that if we are lucky enough to go to college, it is because of the solid fact that we play football and that we are only good at football and nothing else. However, in order to play football at Ohio Wesleyan university you must be able to handle the class load first then football comes second. Where as for say like OSU, Alabama or Auburn talent is important but according to my coach " If you you can participate and have great success in the classroom you can have great success on the football field" you know what he means success in the classroom , you can have even more success on the football field.
ReplyDeleteWomen are just as capable as being successful in sports, as men are. Though people look at men as being stronger and more active, this hasn’t stopped some amazing women from following their dreams and making it to the top. One such player is Serena Williams. Serena Williams is the champion in multiple competitions, such as the French Open, Wimbledon, Australian Open and the Olympics women’s singles and doubles. Some people even say that Serena would beat some men’s tennis players. She is a perfect example of a woman who never let the stereotypes and all the degrading comments get in her way. Growing up, she had a hard life. Her family didn't have money and she had to work hard to achieve her goals. Knowing she loved to play tennis she had to work hard to prove that she could be as good as she thought she could be. Being a woman, not only did she have to practice all the time, but she had to break down those sexist barriers and people that said she couldn't do it because she is a woman. Serena says “luck has nothing to do with it… I have spent many, many hours, countless hours, on the court working.” Serena is a perfect example of a woman who didn't let the unfair stereotypes get in her way.
ReplyDeleteDespite contrary belief, video games can actually be beneficial to the mind. Even though many people believe that video games are a waste of time, there are plenty of puzzle and strategy games available to the masses that test your brain. Some games are even made for the exact purpose of exercising your brain. They do this by making the player solve puzzles that can either be very easy or very complex, in order to move on to the next level or objective. By completing these puzzles, you are actively working on your problem solving skills and reasoning skills. Strategy games also put the player in a similar situation, since they must also use problem solving in order to advance in the game. Probably the best example of a puzzle game would be Tetris. Tetris came out in 1984 and still holds up to this day. The objective of Tetris is to fit falling shapes together so they don’t stack up and go past a certain barrier. A more recent puzzle game that has gained much popularity would be Monument Valley. It is available for both Iphone and Android. Not only is it visually stunning with colorful levels and intense map designs, but also the puzzles are well thought out and take time to complete. Of course there have been many studies debating whether or not these brain games actually benefit the mind. In an article from Scientific American, it is stated that, “evidence is accumulating that they not only improve the skills they are designed to help, but likely generalize to other cognitive abilities and have some long-lasting benefits.” The “they” in that sentence is referring to brain games. These puzzle games don’t have immediate effects; they take time to develop and have more long-lasting effects in daily life.
ReplyDeleteCountry clubs can be good environments for young children and their families. They provide a safe, fun, and friendly environment. The pool gives a place to go during the hot summer days. Also, most children and even adults enjoy going to the pool. It is nice for the children to swim, and most adults like relaxing poolside. If one does not enjoy the pool, normally he or she can golf. Golf gives members a chance to play on nice courses, and most country clubs have very well-managed courses. Also, most country clubs have social events. Those events give people a good chance to socialize. The social aspects can be a big part of members’ lives, and gives them a chance to take pride in being a member of a country club.
ReplyDeleteThe work put into being a student-athlete is visually impaired to the eye of kids in the classroom that doesn't play sports,they don't have to or don't at all think about all the work on and off the field. No matter what sport you play your still labeled as a student-athlete,when I was in high school my head coach always said "to be a student-athlete you have to be great,not only on the field but at being a student first then a athlete"-(Dwaine Mack)Put yourself in student-athletes shoes just for one day out the week,Monday you go to school English professor verbalize you have a test Friday you put that in your notes to study,you continue on with your day finally your at the end of school an yu got so much homework due Thursday. After school you go to practice an your coach give everyone a playbook with new play's in it that yu have to learn before the game Friday the same day you're English test on,by this time you feel like you genuinely have to step it up this week. Remind you it's only Monday an you did not get homework from every professor but you still have a lot to do just from that day,you genuinely have to work strenuously an stay consistent with your homework and the sport you play. People should genuinely start thinking twice before they judge a student-athlete
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Hawai’i struggles to find a solution to end the homelessness problem in their paradise. The islands take advantage of its serene environment and activities that attracts at least 8.3 million tourists per year, producing $14.7 billion. Although, the tourism programs are Hawai’i’s main source on income, the lack of funding for homelessness programs is steadily declining, and with all the tourists coming to Hawai’i, the tourism industry is one of the main causes of the homelessness population to increase. One of the main problems is that tourists migrate to the islands to escape the harsh winters or to simply enjoy the tropical scenery. Unfortunately, some are not fortunate enough to find their way back home due to the lack of income or economic fluctuations of the island’s local economy. The products on the islands have extremely high tax rates, making essentials like a gallon of milk that normally costs $3.73 in the mainland, whereas in Hawai’i milk could be as high as $8.99. Decreasing the rate of taxes could help the whole population of Hawai’i recover from not only homelessness but also its weak economy.
ReplyDeleteMany Asian-American parents struggled to be where they are today. There are two types of these parents who migrated to the United States. The first type of parent is one who went to school in their country of origin and achieved tremendously in order to be accepted into college or get hired for a job in the United States. The second type of parent is one who faced war and hardships in their homeland and fled to the United States, some even left their family behind. In the end, these two types of parents want to provide a better life and future for themselves as well as their children. Compared to the struggles and sacrifices of their parents, completing a few math problems is miniscule. Asian cultures highly value academics, especially in math and science. Therefore, many Asian-American children practice math problems on a daily basis while growing up. They often study the subject much earlier than their peers. Their parents are not cruel for making them do math problems, they just want their children to avoid struggling in the future like they did. These parents emphasize the importance of excelling in math, not because it is an advantage, but because it will provide them with endless opportunities. When a light clicks in a student’s head and they truly understand the subject, they feel a sense of accomplishment not only for himself or herself, but also for their parents. These students excel and are often placed in higher-level math courses compared to their peers. When learning new material, it is common for all students to struggle, even Asian-American students, but due to the years of practicing math, they are often quick-learners. When they earn a high score on their Advanced Placement Calculus exam, which will help them earn a place in college and a job later in life, they will thank their parents and it will show that their sacrifices were not for nothing.
ReplyDeleteThere are many reasons one should treat equally people with this type of appearance. First of all, citizens with the proper dress code, who usually are of a higher social group, can learn many things from a conversation with a person from a different background and a different way of living. There is no way one can learn about the way another is thinking and the reason he has certain opinions if he decides to discriminate him and form an opinion on him without talking to him. By deciding not to start a discussion he misses the opportunity to gain knowledge. You can learn something from every individual while everyone has something useful to say. As said in a lyric by Greek songwriter Jamal: “I chatted last night with a thug/ I hadn’t had such an honest discussion since my child years.”
ReplyDeleteThe problem with those misleading facts is that they can be facts, but they are never truths. Manufacturers deprive consumers of their right to correct information by selling a fact that would help maximize their profit, which can never reveal the whole truth. The thing is that the fact they promote influences consumers to make a decision they would not have made if they had full information, which could play a role in causing a health issue in the future. Trans fat is known to be one of leading causes to heart disease, stroke and diabetes and Stephen Gardner at Health.com suggests the possibility of accumulation of trans fat, “If the consumer were to have two servings, then you would get a good amount added to your diet.” These facts imply a tragedy that one could have to suffer for believing the trans fat-free label and consuming a considerable amount of trans fat unknowingly and unwillingly.
ReplyDeleteWomen are equally successful in the political realm as men because of their diplomatic nature. Men often complain that women do not make good politicians because they are too emotionally involved, therefore, not tough enough. However, emotions may turn into a strength for women because it allows women to make rational decisions, as opposed to the risky, impulsive decisions that males often make. Female politicians utilize reason, intelligence, negotiation, and compromise in making political maneuvers. Women in politics also realize the importance of their decisions because they understand the ways that political decisions impact minority groups. For instance, Malala Yousafzai, a young political activist and aspiring politician, has impacted the world in a revolutionary way. She advocates for women’s rights to education despite being shot and threatened by the Taliban. On her birthday, she even opened a school for Syrian refugee girls. Malala takes immense risks for what she values, radiates confidence, and advocates in peaceful manners; her political leadership is recognized through her reward of the Nobel Peace Prize. Another pivotal activist for minorities was Susan B. Anthony. She was a strong advocator for women’s suffrage and abolition. She says, “The day will come when men will recognize women as his peer, not only at the fireside, but in councils of the nation. Then, and not until then, will there be the perfect comradeship, the ideal union between the sexes that shall result in the highest development of the race.”
ReplyDeleteTimes have changed ever since my parents were teenagers. They said they been through everything I’ve been through already so they say they know how things are. I feel like that’s not right at all. They don’t know really anything how things are now and what the younger generations of children are going through. When my parents were teenagers they didn’t have social media like Facebook, Twitter, and Snapchat for example. It’s so much easier now to communicate with your friends from all over now. You see all your friends having fun on social media and you want to be part of it instead of just being in the house all day and night. My parents think nothing good could come from it they have a point but I feel like they raised me the right way so I know the right things to do so nothing bad would ever happen. I see it as just having fun you only have one life you have to live it to the fullest.
ReplyDeleteIn order for a president to be considered great, they need to have a lasting achievement that would affect America in a positive way. One of the reasons why Truman is considered so highly is because he was very successful in his domestic policies and he set many precedents, such as: starting the National Security Council of 1947, which established the Department of Defense and created the Central Intelligence Agency. Furthermore, Truman was the forefront leader of progressing the nation into civil rights. Another major achievement was in Truman’s second term, which is the Fair Deal. This policy would carryout his predecessor Franklin Roosevelt’s policy. The Fair Deal was focused on “an increase in the minimum wage, expansion of the Social Security program, a housing bill, national health insurance, liberalized immigration laws, and ambitious civil rights legislation for African-Americans” (Alonzo Hamby). Truman was considered ahead of his time when making the Fair Deal and this was the stepping stone for many issues that exist today. This demonstrates Truman’s success in his domestic policies and that he positively affected America.
ReplyDeleteIt is my personal opinion that dyslexic students have an equal amount of potential to becoming successful, same as any other student. Students labeled as dyslexic are commonly ostracized by their teachers and fellow peers as incompetent. Due to their struggle with reading, spelling, and writing, their potential is often undermined. However, given the proper accommodations, these students flourish in subject areas deemed to challenging for them to comprehend. Many od these accommodations are quite simple, and require very little effort to make available to dyslexic students. Technological advancements such as spell check and speech to text have made it possible for dyslexic students to in many aspects over come their learning deficits. Providing them with additional time when taking exams has also proven to be of great help. Dyslexia is not a factor in determining someone’s intelligence. It does not make one more or less intelligent. It simply forces those who are affected by it to find different methods to learn and process information. People in education should strive to make this possible by offering the accommodations that were previously mentioned. By doing so, the process of finding the different methods of learning and processing information will be a far less strenuous task for students with dyslexia. “Dyslexia is not a pigeonhole to say you can’t do anything. It is an opportunity and possibility to learn differently.” (Her Royal Highness Princess Beatrice Elisabeth Mary of York)
ReplyDeleteSoccer players need to be fit in order to play to their full potential. If soccer players cannot run for a full ninety minutes then they will not be the ones that are playing on the field. In order for a soccer player to be fit they have to run, lift, and make sure they are flexible enough so that they do not tear any muscles or ligaments. When soccer players run, they have to be in game shape. The average that a soccer player runs is about 7 miles, but can vary based on positions. The position that racks up the most miles is an outside midfielder, which can run up to 9 miles a game. An anonymous source said that soccer is, “a handful of fit men run around for one and a half hours watched by millions of people who could really use the exercise." Soccer is not only just a sport that requires running, it also involves muscular endurance and weight lifting. The players need to have a core and strong legs in order to prevent injuries that could take place.
ReplyDeleteCommunism maybe generally associated with Karl Marx but, it was actually prevalent way before him (which explains why The Manifesto starts with "A spectre is haunting Europe..."); this start can be attributed to a number of sources which prove that Communism is based off the Christian faith. But there is none better than the example of Tai Ping Revolution in China of the 1820s. The revolution was started when the leader dreamt that he was the second son of God sent on Earth to right the wrongs that had prevailed since Jesus, his brother, had perished. The revolution was marginally successful in establishing a Communist style government where gender equality was emphasized, classist policies were removed and agriculture was focused on. The root word of Communism, therefore, is Commune of the masses - heavily linked with the Christian faith. Even it's policies, which may seem radical to every outside observing, can be traced to Christianity - if all of us are the children of God then all of us are equal in his eyes and must therefore enjoy the fruits of his Earth fully! This shows that while an atheistic doctrine, Communism is not completely devoid of religious morality.
ReplyDeleteLacrosse is actually the first sport of America. The game of lacrosse was first played by Native Americans as a form of war, to help heal sick and to overall make their men stronger. The game was documented by French Jesuit explorers. The first game of women’s lacrosse in Scotland in 1890. In 1933 the United State’s Women’s Lacrosse Association was formed. The same year the USWLA put on its first national tournament in Connecticut between Trenton State University and the University of Massachusetts. Eventually, in 1998, The US Lacrosse was formed and became the national governing body for both men’s and women’s lacrosse. Mostly lacrosse has been an east coast sport but in the past few years the game has been spreading through the Midwest and the west coast. Because of the growth, the game of women’s lacrosse has become highly more competitive and demand a lot of effort and dedication from the players.
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ReplyDeleteColorism emulates white supremacy because individual that process lighter skin pigment is often given better advantages primarily based on the color of their skin. One historical example that was used to illustrate the exact effect of colorism was the paper bag test which was predominantly used within the black community to established if a person of color was “white enough to gain admission” in the more educated and wealthy African American society.Today, colorism is reinforced in our society by black children having Barbie dolls with blond hair and blue eyes and by lowering of Price for black babies at famous shopping center such as Walmart.It is also strengthened by the absence of dark-skinned black people on TV and in magazines, and if dark skin females are in the media, they are often portrayed as an angry individual. With so much discrimination inside a once unify race; this bring up the fundamental questions of What happened to the once powerful phrase "Black is Beautiful"? The black race is made up of many shades, so how can anyone say one is better than another?
ReplyDeleteStudents at OWU studying computer science have to take a lot of math and computer courses, but on their free time they like to go play sports for their team or on their own. Take myself for example. After a long day of studying the coding behind a program, I'd rather go to the gym and practice my jump shot rather than beat the next level on mario kart. Different people all have different ways to relieve stress. Even though some up and coming computer scientists do strive to unlock the black gate in "Runescape", most computer science students have their own individual ways to pass time. When asked about their hobbies, one student said, " I do enjoy playing sports and my major should not stereotype me. People are who they are. Not who others want them to be."
ReplyDeleteBeing muslim has no correlation to being a terrorist. A large majority of people see a Middle Eastern looking person or hear an Arabic sounding name and automatically have prejudices against that person. Often, these prejudices include having suspicious as to whether or not that person is a terrorist. For a Muslim-American student by the name of Balayla Ahmad this was validated when she reported being harassed by a long time stalker. Her harasser was not only not charged with anything. Instead, Balayla was turned into the FBI on suspicion of terrorism for being Muslim because her harasser had spread a rumor that she was a terrorist so that the authorities wouldn’t trust her story. (Christopherson, Huffington Post) Unfortunately the wrongful labeling of innocent muslims has become a common issue. Being a terrorist has no correlation to your religion, skin color, or place of birth. Ahmad had very fair skin and looked nothing like what many think a muslim is supposed to look like other than the fact she wore hijab. Not all muslims wear hijab. Not all muslims are Middle Eastern. Not all Muslims speak Arabic or originate from a foreign country. Not all muslims are identifiable by looking at first glance and in accordance should not be stereotyped and prejudiced by people who have only taken one glance at them.
ReplyDeleteThe term "model minority" both dismisses an individual's hard work, blood, sweat and tears, and keeps other races down. At first it sounds like a compliment, but it's not. For years, Asian Americans have been struggled with the fixed image of being a "model minority." For the general public, this seems like a compliment and example of a positive stereotype, but for many Asian Americans, it is an idea that causes struggles. Even studies have shown that even though Affirmative Actions ensure the equal opportunities for minorities but excluded Asian Americans due to the Model Minority stereotype. During College application processes and even job searches, Asian Americans have to have nearly perfect profile due to the fact that colleges and workplaces are not looking at individual versus the whole application pool but individual versus other applicants of the same race. In the 1980s, several Ivy League schools admitted that they have limited admissions to Asian American students. Because of their high degree of success as a group and over-representation in many areas such as college admissions, most Asian Americans are not granted preferential treatment by affirmative action policies as are other minority groups. A 2005 study by Princeton sociologists Thomas J. Espenshade, Chang Y. Chung and Joan L. Walling compared the effects of affirmative action on racial and special groups at three highly selective private research universities. Using the White race as the control variable, Blacks had +230 points advantage, Hispanics had +185 points advantage but Asians had -50 points disadvantages. The model minority stereotype is emotionally damaging to many Asian Americans, since there are unjustified expectations to live up to stereotypes of high achievement.
ReplyDeleteDyslexia can be different for each person who has it. Some have trouble in different areas, like
ReplyDeletereading, spelling, or math problems. For me it is a little bit of both, and not retaining the information as fast as most of my peers. I was diagnosed in the first grade, and growing up would use the word retard often. Without even knowing what it actually means, and how hurtful it was. I would hide the fact that I was in special education classes from my friends, because I knew they would stereotype me as stupid. I remember one day this girl that I am friends with saw me walk into a special education class, and after class we met up. She said why did you go into that class, I thought it is only for stupid people? I didn’t know how to respond I was in shock. My own friend was stereotyping me as stupid. I explained to her just because I am in that class doesn’t make me stupid, I am bright girl, I just learn differently than other people. But it doesn’t mean that I am not smart, I just have to work harder than most people to succeed, and retain information.
There are many false stereotypes amongst teachers that students would much rather waste their time on social media then schoolwork or socializing. While it is true that some teenagers due suffer from “social media addiction”, most would much rather spend their time learning in the classroom or spending time away from their laptops with their friends. Teens in the 21st century have been given a bad rap due to the emergence of social media and the immediate fascination it brought to the public, however once the initial excitement of Facebook faded, it not longer became the time drain that some adults still believe it to be. “Age 25 to 34, at 29.7% of users, is the most common age demographic. (Source:Emarketer 2012)”. 25 to 34 is an age demographic that misses most college undergrad, our generations addition to Facebook has heavily dwindled since it’s initial public inception.
ReplyDeleteAccording to popular opinion, the GPA of a student seems to be synonymous with the level of intelligence said student possesses. They believe in the notion that a number or letter stuck next to a grade is the be-all end-all in intelligence. This is simply not true. I urge many of you to read up on mental health and the effect that academics has. Scrolling on my twitter timeline, I also see many of my fellow colleagues stressing out about the workload their teachers/professors have instilled upon them because it is getting more and more difficult to balance the fine line between academics/sports/social time. According to theguardian.com, “research indicating nearly half of academics show symptoms of psychological distress”. I implore all of you to not bat a blind eye to this. You may ask yourself, what does this have to do with GPA? Well, we live in a world where your GPA is supposed to be the “big ticket” for lack of a better word. But is it worth the psychological issues many students seem to be suffering from?
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ReplyDeleteThe idea that art majors "have it easy" or "don't have to try as hard" as non majors is comical, as they are expected to put an exceeding amount of time and effort into their work. This is evidenced on the amount of class time required, as studios meet for 6 hours a week, double the amount of time of a regular course that meets MWF. Furthermore, art students have 24 access to their respective buildings, with the idea that the workload can't be completed within a normal business day. This is part due to the nature of the work, which requires more consistent effort than that of other majors, where it’s feasible to pull an all-nighter to study for an exam or write a term paper. Many studios employ techniques and processes that simply can’t be rushed. As my sculpture professor Jon Quick always explains, working down to the wire results in “poor craftsmanship, and an even poorer grade”. Art majors work hard to see their ideas to completion, and though it may seem “more fun” than other majors, studying art comes with its own set of challenges that are often overlooked.
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